Monday, October 03, 2011

Editing: a Lost Art

A story in today's USA Today has this clinker for a lead sentence:
WASHINGTON – Pakistan is the source of explosives in the vast majority of makeshift bombs insurgents in Afghanistan planted this summer to attack U.S. troops, according to U.S. military commanders.


Not one of my high school English teachers would have accepted that abomination of a sentence in their students' work.  Why is it acceptable in a news item?  I would say that you can read the rest of the article here, but when the piece starts off that badly, why would you?

1 comment:

Ran said...

..."to attack U.S. troops, according to U.S. military commanders."

"B-b-b-but zey vere only foloving oh-duhz!" - something like that. Who knew?

Yup. The editing sux over there at McPaper.